International tourist should pay more than the local visitor for cultural and historical attractions. Do you agree or disagree?

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In some

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places

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places,

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visitors

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who come from another

country

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need to pay more than

native

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to view some ancient

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. I strongly disagree

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statement because

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visitors

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will eventually decrease and it will affect other sectors which

depends

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tourism

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. In my opinion,

tourism

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is one of the leading

economy

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for many countries

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from

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tourism

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the tourism

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industry

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, most of the

visitors

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coming

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this

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country

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to experience

tropical

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environment with

rich

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culture and to see

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related monuments. But when getting

ticket

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tickets

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higher than local

visitor

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visitors

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it will create a bad impression about the

country

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because they already paying

lot

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of money and taxes for local services and

this

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kind of price amount is

also

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burden

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them

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. In that case, people who

are already visited

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the

country

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experince

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experience

experienced

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incidents will not come again or not

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to others for their vacations.

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visitor

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will reduce and it will directly or indirectly affect not only

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but

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other local businesses as well.

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produces

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and sellers and more.

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, by providing reasonable

price

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prices

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to all the

visitor

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visitors

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who

are

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visiting

historialcal

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historical

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we can increase the tourist attention

as well as

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their satisfaction. In conclusion, I do not

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the way of treating international

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by asking

higher

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price

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prices

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to visit historical and cultural

places

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. Because it will create

bad

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reputation

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for

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country

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the country

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and

instead

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of earning through higher prices best earn from their satisfaction

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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