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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the user should pay for the cost. Discuss both views and give your opinio

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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. There is an idea
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the government
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responsible for bringing balance between road load and
Cars
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 numbers .
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the other part of society
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 that
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individuals
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paid
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 for their decisions . I am going to compare both sides of
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 sentences . First of all ,
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 of
transporation
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transportation
 is a huge project that must be
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organized
organised
 by powerful companies to build , improve or repair previous roads ,
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budget
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 that owners of
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the automobile
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automobile
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 cannot b able to handle the problem which arises from these
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imbalance
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however
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 on changing habits to use of personal car or public transportation ,maybe these attitude wants to push these papulation to pay for that . In sum
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,I believe
road
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 system must be organized by
government
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the government
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks clear structure. It should have distinct paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion. Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea with supporting sentences.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction is unclear and incomplete. It should present the topic, both views, and your own opinion briefly.
coherence cohesion
Main points need further development. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence followed by explanations or examples to support the argument.
task achievement
Your essay does not fully address the task. You need to discuss both the view that the government should pay for road systems and the view that users should pay, before giving your own opinion.
task achievement
Ideas need to be expressed more clearly and comprehensively. Use full sentences and ensure you explain your ideas fully for the reader to understand.
task achievement
Use relevant and specific examples to support your points. This requires citing real-world scenarios or hypothetical situations that directly relate to the argument you are making.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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