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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates
salary
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a salary
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 comparison between four different jobs in the UK when they started and
three
years
 later.
While the
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The
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 table presents
working
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the working
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hours
 per week
in
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on
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 average for those occupations.
Overall
, there is increasing income for all four professions after
three
years
, with underground driver becoming the
highest paid
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highest-paid
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 work. Meanwhile,
firefighter
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a firefighter
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 works the longest compared to other jobs.
To begin
 with,
Underground
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the Underground
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 driver gets the highest income. They got paid around 50,000
pounds
 when they started the job,
then
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and then
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 the number of incomes increased slightly to 51,000
pounds
.
Similarly
,
Firefighter
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Firefighters
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 got paid
of
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apply
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40,000
pounds
then
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apply
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it
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which
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 rose by 1,000
pounds
 in the next
three
years
.
In contrast
,
Police
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the Police
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 had the biggest raise
of
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in
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 salary, which is 2,000
pounds-from
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pounds from
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 21,000 to 23,000
pounds
-.
Lastly
, Nurse has the least money from 18,000 to 19,000
pounds
 in the
three
years
. On the other side, Firefighter has the longest weekly working
hours
 with 55
hours
 compared to
other
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apply
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three
 other professions, namely Police, Nurse and Underground driver with 40, 38 and 36
hours
 respectively.
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