The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of manufacturing carbonated drink
in detail.
The first Fix the agreement mistake
drinks
stage
is Water
Cleaning, in the first,
Raw water
is entered a Filter then
it was convert
into Wrong verb form
is converted
Water
softener and Chemicals and after that, it is pumped to Electric heaters at the end
of this
stage
.
Secondly
, Water
is mixed with Carbon dioxide through Cooling
pipe and after Add an article
the Cooling
a Cooling
that
it Add a comma
that,
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
enterd
the mixing tank as Carbonated Correct your spelling
enters
water
. Thirdly
, three different materials such
as Colourings, Syrup and Flavour are added into Carbonated water
then
they are mixed together. Next after a filter, it is provided in the bottles and cans in the fourth stage
of this
process
. Finally
, in the last
stage
of this
process
, products are packaged as drinks and they are sent to the supermarkets.
Overall
, the diagram represents a process
of producing carbonated drink
in a total of five main stages from factory to supermarkets.Fix the agreement mistake
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