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Band 4.5

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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First of all,
grades
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 show
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' knowledge. If a person gets a high
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 it means that he understands that subject very well.
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 it means that he does not understand it completely. Personally, when I get a lower
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 I expected I know that I could be better prepared. So, next
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 I will spend more
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 to fix my lack of knowledge and do my best on the
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 low
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 encourage me to learn more. I try to analyze my mistakes and avoid them next
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, I try to arrange my
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that I can do better than that, so I collect all my strength and focus on the incoming
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. It is like a new goal or obstacle that one should overcome in order to continue his path. When
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 I get a higher
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 I feel satisfaction and I am proud of myself. I think it is a great feeling. I feel stronger, more self-confident and patient. I think these qualities are essential for a person who wants to achieve something and succeed in the future. Second of all,
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 have some kind of competition
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 each other for higher
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 another one, the second
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 something wrong with me? Is he better than me? ". I think every
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 at least one
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 up, I think there is no doubt that
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 to learn, gain more experience,
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 more self-confident and persistent.
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, I am sure that these small victories will help
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 to win and succeed in the future.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your thesis statement. The body paragraphs need to be well-organized, each with a central idea and supporting details. The conclusion should effectively summarize the main points and restate your opinion. The essay provides elements of structure but could benefit from a more explicit introduction and a clearer conclusion.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task sufficiently, for example, make sure that the reasons for your agreement or disagreement with the statement are clear, developed, and supported by specific details or examples. This response needs better development of ideas and examples that are more detailed to fully address the prompt.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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