The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.
The diagram highlights the manufacturing of aluminium
cans
which are to be recycled there are seven steps in the
process
from
transfering
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transferring
the
cans
through trucks to
labling
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labelling
back and ready to be used again after the
cans
are used, they are discarded in recycling bins., waiting for
truck
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to transport them to
recycling
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the recycling
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plant once there , they are cleaned with water and sorted out in form
of
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group
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the group
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which is
then
ready for shredding and compressing during
this
process
the unusable
cans
are pas to shredding
maching
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machine
matching
machines
while
those that can be reused are compressed into blocks the blocks
are turn
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down by crushing machine into
small
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a small
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process
which
are
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subsequently
cleaned to remove any residue
furthermore
,
the next step is
to pass these small pieces into
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healing
heating
healting
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a healting
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and melting machine to form raw material
as
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apply
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these
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raw material is made into aluminium
cans
which are labelled over these
cans
as these
label
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plastics
having
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a 5-6mm thickness
finally
the
cans
are ready to be filled with liquid and ready to be recycled as these
cans
go through the recycling
process
all over again 74 % of
british
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citizen reused the recycled
cans
overall
, the recycling of aluminium
cans
is a cyclical
process
that
consist
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of use
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collecting
colleting
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collecting
sorting crushing melting and
labeling
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labelling
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and
reused
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them again all over
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling process
  • aluminum cans
  • collection phase
  • sorting and cleaning
  • contaminants
  • crushing
  • melting phase
  • molded
  • energy efficiency
  • environmental benefits
  • economy
  • sustainable practices
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