The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.
The diagram highlights the manufacturing of aluminium
cans
which are to be recycled there are seven steps in the process
from transfering
the Correct your spelling
transferring
cans
through trucks to labling
back and ready to be used again
after the Correct your spelling
labelling
cans
are used, they are discarded in recycling bins., waiting for truck
to transport them to Add an article
a truck
the truck
recycling
plant once there , they are cleaned with water and sorted out in form Correct article usage
the recycling
of
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apply
group
which is Add an article
the group
a group
then
ready for shredding and compressing during this
process
the unusable cans
are pas to shredding maching
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machine
matching
machines
while
those that can be reused are compressed into blocks the blocks are turn
down by crushing machine into Change the verb form
are turned
are turning
small
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a small
the small
process
which are
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is
subsequently
cleaned to remove any residue
furthermore
, the next step is
to pass these small pieces into Correct your spelling
healing
heating
healting
and melting machine to form raw material Correct article usage
a healting
as
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apply
these
raw material is made into aluminium Change the determiner
this
cans
which are labelled over these cans
as these label
plastics Replace the word
labelled
having
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have
finally
the cans
are ready to be filled with liquid and ready to be recycled as these cans
go through the recycling process
all over again 74 % of british
citizen reused the recycled Change the capitalization
British
cans
overall
, the recycling of aluminium cans
is a cyclical process
that consist
of use Change the verb form
consists
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collecting
colleting
sorting crushing melting and Correct your spelling
collecting
labeling
and Change the spelling
labelling
reused
them again all overWrong verb form
reusing
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