Freshwater is a limited resource in certain regions of the world. Today, the escalating demand has transformed it into a global problem. What are the causes of increasing demand? What measures can governments and individuals take to respond to the problem?

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protection has become one of the most pressing environmental issues in an increasingly globalised world, especially freshwater.
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essay will consider the causes of and suggest possible solutions to it. Perhaps the biggest reason is the number of factories and industries increased dramatically which will directly cause environmental pollution,
such
as rubbish and wastewater discharged into the ocean. It is conceivable that the consequences will be serious.
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, if a large number of marine life die, people's health will be worse quickly. What is more, with more vehicles coming out,
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more carbon emissions will produced, which means that it will significantly affect air quality and
thus
water
quality. There will be less and less drinking
water
for people. Turning to possible solutions, probably the most effective measure is for the government to impose some policies to ban or hider these ways, increasing
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environment
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protection activities regularly which all the companies will
engaged
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in, holding some related
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to let people know as much as possible about the disadvantages of harming the
environment
. It is
also
necessary to regulate individuals' behaviour, not throw rubbish everywhere,
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awareness of protecting the
environment
, as they know the most fundamental harmful to their physical health from the poor
water
environment
, they will pay more attention to it.
To sum up
, the impact that caused
water
pollution by factories, industries and vehicles is profound and requires the government's and our immediate attention and actions.There are ample solutions to
this
environmental concern.
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