The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
The diagram illustrates the way in which
bricks
are produced for the building industry.
Overall
, the process consists of seven stages, beginning with the clay is
gotten by Unnecessary verb
apply
digger
and ending Correct article usage
the digger
up
with the product’s delivery.
First of all, clay is dug up from land by a huge digger and Change preposition
apply
then
broken down through metal
grid. Correct article usage
a metal
Due to
this
sand and water mixed
in it, after Add a missing verb
were mixed
that
it rolled with a roller. Afterwards, the mixture of sand and water Correct pronoun usage
apply
put
on Add a missing verb
was put
wire
cutter to form their shape, Correct article usage
a wire
then
it Correct word choice
and then
placed
in a mold to obtain Add a missing verb
was placed
bricks
.
In the next stage, bricks
dried in an oven about
24-48 hours. Change preposition
for about
Following
this
subsequently
, they are heated in kiln
at moderate with Correct article usage
a kiln
a
high Correct article usage
apply
temperature
( ranging Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
870
to 1300).After Change preposition
from 870
that
it went through Add a comma
that,
cooling
chamber for 2-3 days. In the final stage, Correct article usage
a cooling
bricks
are packaged one by one and it is delivered by track.Submitted by dnm.best on
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