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The diagram show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010

The diagram show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010
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the given map depicts information about the
changes
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 which were made in the museum and its surroundings areas in 1990 and 2010
initially
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, the museum contain the main
path
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 which
straight
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is straight
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 ahead to the garden that
including
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includes
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palnts
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plants
 and trees. to the left
side
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 of the
path
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 there
is
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was
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huge
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a huge
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 car park
area
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 which was shared with
ground
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the ground
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 by having a
zig zag
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zig-zag
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 line between them to the left
side
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 of the
path
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 there was
large
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a large
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 block which was divided into two main
part
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parts
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 the bottom end contained
cottage
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a cottage
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area
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while
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 the upper
area
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 contained the main entrance store room and three shops next to each other after that, both the sides of
park
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the park
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 was attached to the main road on the other
hands
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hand
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, the main road followed by
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path
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a path
the path
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 which leads to
garden
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the garden
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 remained the same
however
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, the right
side
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 of
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path
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the path
a path
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 that
were
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was
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 shared
in
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apply
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between but now
it
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apply
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has been made for
car
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a car
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 park extended it longer occupying the
area
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 of the garden
moreover
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, to the left
side
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 the cottage was replaced by cafe and shops that were three in number now reduced to two in total. the entrance and store room space
seen
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have seen
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 some
changes
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 too
overall
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, it is
vivdly
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vividly
 manifested that there was some
changes
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 made
according to
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 its surrounding
however
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 major
changes
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 were made on the left
side
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 of the
path
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, path, side, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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