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The given maps compare the changes that took place at a city hospital in 2 different years,2007 and 2010

The given maps compare the changes that took place at a city hospital in 2 different years,2007 and 2010
the two maps provide information about the differences
how
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in how
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 to access
to
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apply
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the city hospital
in
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apply
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over a
tree-year
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three-year
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 period.
Overall
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, there are some places changes like the roundabouts, a new
car
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park
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 and the
replacment
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replacement
the
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of the
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bus
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 stop to the
bus
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 station.
to begin
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 with the first map
at
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in
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 2007, the
road
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 to go to the hospital
still
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is still
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 easy and does not have a lot of conjunction
of
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with
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 the traffic.
In addition
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, the centre hospital
located
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is located
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sourander
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surrender
 of the ring
road
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, and
in
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on
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 the east
side
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 there is
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bus
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the bus
a bus
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 station. After that, if you turn to the south there is
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car
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a car
the car
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park
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, in front of
this
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 position
has
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is
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hospital
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the hospital
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road
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. in the other map
urban
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of urban
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hospital
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hospitals
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 in 2010 period, there are two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 called hospital
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road
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roads
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 that
connected
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connect
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 to
city
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the city
a city
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 hospital,
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bus
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a bus
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 station
in
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on
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 the left
side
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, and
staff
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a staff
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car
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park
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in
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on
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 the right
side
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.
Abbove
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Above
 all, the public
car
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park
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 has numerous changes which
located
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is located
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to
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on
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 the east
side
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 of the city hospital.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, park, bus, road, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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