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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land become less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990's.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land become less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990's.
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The pie chart illustrates the causes of worldwide
land
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degradation
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,
while
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 the table presents the reasons that influenced three regions (North
America
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,
Europe
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, and Oceania) during the 1990s.
Overall
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, it is obvious that over-grazing was the main reason that led to the
degradation
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 of
land
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.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, the
degradation
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 of
Europe
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 was the highest compared to the other two regions. In the case of the reason for worldwide
land
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degradation
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, over-grazing was the main contributing factor which made up 35%.
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, the proportion of deforestation was
also
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 high (30%)
in contrast
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 to others which impacted the least (7%). Regarding over-cultivation, the percentage was 28%. As for total
land
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 degraded,
Europe
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 was the highest. The proportion of degraded
land
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 was 23% in
Europe
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, 13% in Oceania, and 5% in North
America
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. With regards to deforestation, the percentage of
degradation
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 was 9.8% in
Europe
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, but 0.2% in North
America
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. Turning to over-cultivation, the
land
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 in
Europe
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 still degraded the most (7.7%).
By contrast
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, Oceania did not have any degraded
land
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;
however
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, it comprised 11.3% of over-grazing, which was the highest. The percentages of
Europe
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 and North
America
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 in over-grazing made up 5.5% and 1.5% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, america, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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