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The maps below show Colwick Arts Centre in 2005 and today

The maps below show Colwick Arts Centre in 2005 and today
#maps #show #colwick #arts #centre
The diagrams
illustrates
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 Colwick Arts
Centre
 between 2005 and today.
Overall
, at first glance,
it is clear that
 Colwick Arts
Centre
 has witnessed major development in its infrastructure. Being ruralised in the previous year.
However
, now the art
centre
 visibly changed into
developed
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 one.
According to
 the
map
, a snack bar was located on the
north-eastern
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northeastern
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 side of the
map
 and it has been separated
in
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into
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 3 different buildings. These are drama studio, meeting room 1 and meeting room 2. There was a concert hall and a cinema in the middle of the
map
 which was demolished.
Instead
 of that building, the cinema has been reconstructed
at
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 the west side of the drama studio. The meeting room and the toilet in the
south-west
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southwest
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 of the information desk
was
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were
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 replaced with
bigger
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a bigger
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 building
of
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in
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 the gallery. But the information desk has
been remained
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 the same. The wasteland to the south was flattened and
give
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gave
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 way to the outdoor exhibition and performance area. The stage is constructed just beside the exhibition area and it is surrounded by some trees. At the
centre
 of the
map
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map,
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 the central exhibition area
os
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is
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opened
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open
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.
Also
, the gallery 1 and the gallery 2 was replaced with the concert hall on the west side of the
map
. The toilet to the south of the concert hall is built.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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