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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
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The
map
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 illustrates the development of the village called Ryemouth between 1995 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
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.
Overall
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, there were several changes,
however
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, the most significant change was the deforestation of
forest
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the forest
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 park. As can clearly be seen, In the past
in
Change preposition
on
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 the east of the
map
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 there was farmland and
forest
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a forest
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 park. In the West of the
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map
Add a comma
map,
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 there used to be a housing. There
also
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 were a shop, fish market, hotel, cafe and a fishing port. Turning to
present
Correct article usage
the present
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, as the
map
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 illustrates, there were several changes, in the place where used to be a shop now there is a restaurant and in the place where used to be
fish
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a fish
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 market currently there are apartments. Next to the hotel was built a car park. In 1995 there used to be a fishing port, which currently cannot be seen.
Linking Words
However
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However,
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besides
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 several
changes
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changes,
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 there was a cafe which was the same as it was in 1995.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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