Some people think that the universities must only accept student with high mark, while others believe that universities must accept students of all ages regardless of their previous grades. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A number of people believe that only high-graded
students
must be accepted in universities,
on the other hand
, some hold the view that no matter how unsatisfactory the previous
grades
are or how old the
students
are, they are still eligible to enter the universities. I think that it is fair not to limit
students
' entrance by means of their age and former performance results.
Firstly
, It is probable that the
grades
of a hard worker became low or even he decided to quit
university
for a couple of years for any reason. It is not logical that the mentioned backgrounds hinder the academic journey of a
student
who plans to have a new beginning.
For instance
, if a young lady gives birth to her child and avoids studying, she may have a gap. Apart from her
grades
as well, it is still her right to continue her education at the
university
she desires.
Secondly
, If the
students
have no stress about the way their quality of exam results may affect their future goal
that is
university
entrance, they may perform more efficiently and achieve a higher chance in the acceptance competition. Obviously, highly qualified
students
enhance the
overall
university
performance comprehensively.
however
, high
grades
in previous levels do not guarantee the appropriate future functionality of a
student
.
Therefore
, judging
students
based on what is mentioned is not logically reasonable. As an example, a
student
can have high marks in her former semester,
while
in the latter one, he faces a health problem that influences his performance in the final exams.
Additionally
, the number of
students
who are eligible may astonishingly decrease and the educational institution may face financial issues routed in the low levels of the paid tuition fees because the strict acceptance criteria caused a low population scholar community, even though its expenditures are not proportionally decreasing. In conclusion, some may argue that academies must only accept
students
with high
grades
, but I think any
student
can participate in
university
despite the years he spent far from the academic environment of the
grades
he previously achieved. In conclusion, some may argue that universities must only accept
students
with high
grades
, but I think any
student
can participate in
university
despite the years he spent far from the academic environment of the
grades
he previously achieved.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Meritocracy
  • Curricula
  • Inclusive
  • Mature students
  • Disadvantaged backgrounds
  • Workforce
  • Holistic review
  • Portfolios
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Diverse student body
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