The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations.

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations.
The graph illustrates details about the figures of Catholics
leaving
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in separate countries.
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,
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apply
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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lead
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the charts from the beginning until the end of the period, even though they had a decrease
at the end
. Japan was the least
althoght
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although
there was a slight increase, it was not enough to be better than
anyother
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any other
another
country. In 2010, China and India stood at 9000,000 and 10,570,000 respectively. In corresponding they are the only two countries that saw
thier
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their
figure
increaased
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increase
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2013 with 15,000,000 and 19,000,000. Japan
also
saw a 100 boost in their digits.
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The Phillipines
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Phillipines
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Philippines
lead the graph with 7500 that figure which witnessed a drop
300
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of 300
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in 2015.
Viernam
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Vietnam
saw a slight deep between
then
period
while
the largest drop came from
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Korea
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korea
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Korea
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whose number fell dramatically by 400
at the end
of the given period
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