The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.
The table compares the annual incomes of school teachers in five different countries at various stages of their careers in 2009.
Overall
,
it is clear that
teachers in Luxembourg earn significantly higher salaries compared to pedagogues in
the
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other countries,
while
Australia has the lowest maximum salary after 15
years
of experience. At the beginning of their careers, teachers in Luxembourg earn the highest annual income at 80000, followed by Denmark, Australia, and Korea at 47000, 34600, and 30500, respectively. Japanese educators have the lowest starting salary at 28000. After 15
years
, educators in Luxembourg reach a peak salary of 112000, which can increase to 139000 after 30
years
.
In contrast
, pedagogues in Denmark, Korea, Japan, and Australia earn between 48000 and 54000 per year at the same stage of
their
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length of their service. Australian and Danish educators reach their maximum pay in less than 10
years
,
while
their Korean and Japanese colleagues take much longer to reach their maximum earnings of up to 139000, 84500, and 62400, respectively.
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  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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