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The table below shows the average monthly rainfall in two different cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the average monthly rainfall in two different cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table depicts how many
inches
about
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of
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rainfall
, over the year between January to December in
Woodsville
 and
Blackboro
.
Overall
, in
Woodsville
 maximum
rainfall
in
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from
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 November to December. In
Blackboro
 it
become
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has
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 minimal
rainfall
compare
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compared
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 with
Woodsville
. In
Woodsville
, it has
maximum
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a maximum
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 number of
raining
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rain
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in
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from
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 November to
Decembe
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December
. It is about 6 and 5.5
inches
 respectively.
Lowest
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The lowest
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rain
 came in July and it
is
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was
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 0.75
inches
.
In
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From
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 January to
July
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July,
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Woodsville
rainfall
 dramatically
decrease
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decreased
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 over these 7 months. It is shows 5,4,3.75,2.5,1.75,1.5 and 0.75 orderly. On the
oher
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other
hand
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hand,
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Blackboro
 normally
illustrate
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illustrates
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minimal
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the minimal
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 value of
rain
. In
Blackboro
 May to September
rainfall
inches
 less than 1. July is
ths
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the
 lowest
rain
 came in
this
 city. It is about 0.01.
In
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From
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 January to
February
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February,
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 it becomes much considerable
rain
 about 3,4
inches
 respectively.
Finally
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Finally,
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compare
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compared
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 with these two cities
Woodsville
is
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has
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the
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apply
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remarkable
rainfall
comes
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apply
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words inches, rainfall, woodsville, blackboro, rain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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