The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
On the map above, it
show
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the center of Paris. And it
also
shows two new restaurants of a company.
This
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Location
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location
1
that
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apply
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is on the top left of the map,
which
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is on the Northwest and
it
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is next to the Maritime Museum and the park. The Aquarium
also
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is also
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on the east of the
restaurant
. There will be many
people
coming here because of 2000
visitors
from the Aquarium and 8000
visitors
who visit the Maritime Museum each
day
to go to the
restaurant
and have a meal. The
location
2 is on the left bank, which is on the other side of the river.
This
restaurant
is between the Art Gallery and the famous building, the Eiffel Tower. The benefits of opening
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a resturant
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resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
here are that the
restaurant
mights
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might
nights
get 16000
visitors
from the
Effel
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Eiffel
Tower each
day
, 750
visitors
from Art Galler each
day
and even 500
visitors
from
sport
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the sport
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centre each
day
.
Overall
, on
the
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location
1 can
get
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be
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around 10000
people
, 8000
visitors
from the Museum each
day
and 2000
visitors
from the Aquarium each
day
to come here and have a meal. On
the
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apply
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location
2 can
get
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be
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around 17000
people
, which is more than the first
restaurant
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restaurant's
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7000
people
. Because 16000
visitors
from
Effel
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Eiffel
Tower, and the rest
visitors
are from Art Gallery and
Sport
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Sports
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Centre.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words location, restaurant, people, visitors, day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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