The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
On the map above, it
show
the center of Paris. And it Change the verb form
shows
also
shows two new restaurants of a company.
This
Correct determiner usage
Location
location
1 that
is on the top left of the map, Correct pronoun usage
apply
which
is on the Northwest and Correct pronoun usage
apply
it
is next to the Maritime Museum and the park. The Aquarium Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
on the east of the Add a missing verb
is also
restaurant
. There will be many people
coming here because of 2000 visitors
from the Aquarium and 8000 visitors
who visit the Maritime Museum each day
to go to the restaurant
and have a meal.
The location
2 is on the left bank, which is on the other side of the river. This
restaurant
is between the Art Gallery and the famous building, the Eiffel Tower. The benefits of opening Correct article usage
a resturant
resturant
here are that the Correct your spelling
restaurant
restaurants
restaurant
mights
get 16000 Correct your spelling
might
nights
visitors
from the Effel
Tower each Correct your spelling
Eiffel
day
, 750 visitors
from Art Galler each day
and even 500 visitors
from sport
centre each Correct article usage
the sport
day
.
Overall
, on the
Correct article usage
apply
location
1 can get
around 10000 Verb problem
be
people
, 8000 visitors
from the Museum each day
and 2000 visitors
from the Aquarium each day
to come here and have a meal. On the
Correct article usage
apply
location
2 can get
around 17000 Verb problem
be
people
, which is more than the first restaurant
7000 Change noun form
restaurant's
people
. Because 16000 visitors
from Effel
Tower, and the rest Correct your spelling
Eiffel
visitors
are from Art Gallery and Sport
Centre.Change the noun form
Sports
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