The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations.

#information #catholics #nations

This

bar chart shows

about

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people who

belongs

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to the

catholic

religions in various nations

such

as China, India,

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the phillippines

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phillippines

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Philippines

Phillippines

, Vietnam, Korea and Japan. From the

overall

perspective,

Philippines

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the Philippines

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had the highest amount of

catholic

religion in both two periods.

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the chart shown

that

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Philippines has the highest

people

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belongs

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to the

catholic

religion which

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was

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around 75

millions

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folks in 2010 and

this

ratio

has

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reduced slightly in 2013 which is 72

millions

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, China and India

were

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increased drastically the

catholic

population from

first

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period to the

last

year above mentioned which is India had 9

millions

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from 15

millions

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and China around 11

millions

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from 19

millions

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respectively. These three nations were not

noticeable

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changes which slightly

changes

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from 2010 to 2013 which is Vietnam had around 5.5

millions

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to around 5.3

millions

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and Korea had around 5.2

millions

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to around 1.3

millions

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respectively. Japan had 4

millions

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in 2010 and

catholic

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the catholic

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religion

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popualtion

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population

had

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expanded slightly in 2013 which is around 5

millions

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million

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The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations.

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