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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations.

Computers and A.I. technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society?

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to university, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree ?

Topic : Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others believe that individuals also can do some things to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.