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The graphs below show the number of calls a company recieved at their Nigerian call centre in connection with the various car models they produced.

The graphs below show the number of calls a company recieved at their Nigerian call centre in connection with the various car models they produced.
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The graph gives information about the numerous calls
receiving
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received
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 from a lot
off
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of
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customer
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customers
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 from
Nigerian
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Nigerians
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 who
connected
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are connected
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 by
cars
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car
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 models produced.
Overall
, there are five types of car with a different
ration
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ratio
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 by the customer over a
five-years
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five-year
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 period.
To begin
 with, the number
call
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of call
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centre
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centres
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 significantly rose in
model
 D. Even though, in the 2010 era
got
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 94 call
centre
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centres
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, for five years
letter
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apply
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the number slightly
fall
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 become 88. The second position in car
model
 C their received 71 in 2010 time in
2015
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the 2015
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 period
increase
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increased
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 13
number
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numbers
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of phone
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phone
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phones
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.
As well as
,
model
 E accepted 68 and fall in
2015
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of 2015
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arrange
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apply
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57
collected
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were collected
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.
On the other hand
 , the percentage
at
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apply
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who got
range
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a range
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50
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of 50
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 call centers are
model
 A and
model
 B for both of the
period
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periods
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. For
model
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models
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 A and B in 2010 century
pick
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picked
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 up 52 and 33 total
call
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calls
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, despite in 2015
become
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there was
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the
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a
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gradually
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gradual
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 decrease between 49 and 24
admit
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admitting
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 the calling.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words model with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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