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Some countries have recently passed laws limiting the daily working hours of employees. Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact.

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Today we have a huge problem with
employees
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 spending extra
time
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 during their
work
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 . Governments have tried to solve it by passing daily working
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 limits for companies. In my opinion,
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 solution is a good try, but it could
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 partly and not in the way that the government expected.
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 have some positive part.
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 , the main plus is
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 would
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 at a fixed
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 and companies couldn't force their
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 to do overtime tasks as free as they had done
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 before.
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 , corporations might have restrictive penalties and workers would be protected by laws in front of them.
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, overtime
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hours
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 should decrease and
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 would create a healthy atmosphere in the company.
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 , it could help to decrease the number of
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 with diseases caused by working extra
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.
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 , a job done after passing daily limits has some negatives.
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 , some
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 have the possibility to
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 efficiently at different
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 and it would be working at midnight.
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 , business could be abused by
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 who feel impunity for their fixed
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time
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 and won't do their tasks on
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 .
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 , companies might have a huge loss in their funds after
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work
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 less
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 and
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 would impact on country's economy .
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, after weighing the pros and cons of
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 government's decision, I suppose it was the fastest and safest reaction to prevent global problems with the health of
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 and the real compulsion to
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 overtime from corporations.

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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position on the topic, and your conclusion effectively summarizes your arguments and restates your viewpoint.
Logical Structure
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Supported Main Points
Support your main points with relevant examples and further elaboration to strengthen your arguments.
Complete Response
Address all parts of the task by providing a balanced discussion on both the positive and negative impacts of the law limiting daily working hours.
Clear & Comprehensive Ideas
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Relevant & Specific Examples
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Burnout
  • Work-life balance
  • Productivity
  • Economic output
  • Labor hours
  • Stress levels
  • Unemployment rates
  • Wages
  • Salaries
  • Standard of living
  • Corporate culture
  • Workflows
  • Operational costs
  • Profit margins
  • Restructuring
  • Job satisfaction
  • Leisure time
  • Adaptation
  • Physical and mental health
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