Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Worldwide, these days people started doing jobs and learning indoors
due to
the developments of technology which makes it more convenient money-wise and opportunity area . This
essay fully supports these changes and will give several reasons in detail and personal experiences.
To begin
with, one of the main benefits include
building a relationship with your close family. People who work inside doors are able to spend more time and have the privilege to experience family lunch, breakfast and dinner together which gives the relationship a tight bond that can not Correct subject-verb agreement
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For example
, I have seen my older sister working online in a tech company. She has a wonderful life and more time to do shopping, cooking, cleaning and communicating with her husband, daughter and son. Overall
having a better life instead
of jumping around and coming home exhausted.
Furthermore
, when it comes to learning opportunities there will be less distraction. If someone is at home studying, monitoring and continued evaluation by parents will probably occur. In addition
, no other interactions with classmates and all these lead to gain
a better knowledge capacity rather than Wrong verb form
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by others which is a bonus. Add a missing verb
being influenced
For instance
, when COVID-19 occurred in 2019 there was a lot of online teaching and learning increased with
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education centres started teaching online which would never have happened if there Correct word choice
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, brains worked excessively and brought up even new ideas, all the marks of students doubled. Surprisingly, this
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it took multiple lives.
To conclude
, online teaching and working at home have several positive sides including a strong relationship between family and less distraction on the education side.Submitted by Abdulrahimmohamudali on
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Use a variety of transition words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly, which can make your argument easier to follow.
task achievement
Address the task directly and make sure you answer all parts of the question. Here, you should clearly state if the development is positive or negative in your thesis statement and keep your discussion focused on this stance throughout.
task achievement
Enhance your argument by providing more detailed examples and evidence. Rather than just mentioning personal observations, try to include data, studies, or more specific experiences that support your points.
coherence cohesion
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