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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.
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This
 report derives from a diagram which illustrates the comparison between the current layout of the library and its previous plan relating to 20 years ago. As an initial point, it is noticeable that
although
 the main entrance has remained the same, every
room
 on the previous library's floor has been replaced by some other modern amenities. Upon entering, there used to
set
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a
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tables and chairs which can be seen now as straight ahead. They replaced the resting tools
to
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in
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 the east
room
at
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on
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 the left which
have
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 storytelling events,
sofa
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a sofa
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 and children's
fictions
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fiction
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books
where
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was
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at
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 the right side.
Furthermore
,
while
 the adult fiction
books
 section used to be located between the CDs, videos, and computer games section and reading
room
 has moved to the opposite side
if
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 the site, to provide spaces for reference
books
.
Additionally
,
cafe
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the cafe
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room
where
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which
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be
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is
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at
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 the right in front of the entrance was not
founded
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 at the old version of the library's floor.
Finally
,
children's
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the children's
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books
 section has given place to the current lecture
room
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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