The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.

The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.
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table provides data on the number of
people
who
visted
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visited
a
meuseum
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museum before
befor
and after its
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,
while
the pie charts illustrate the satisfaction of those visitors in both two
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through surveys.
Overall
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number of visitors who visited the historical site after finishing its work
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was more than that of went there
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before
the refurbishment.
Also
the number of individuals who has the highest satisfaction rise from
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work has been done.
According to
the table, the population of visitors increased by 18,000
people
from 74,000 to 92,000. As
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clear from the pie charts, the portion of very satisfied
people
rose about 20% from
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before
the redesigning work to after that and reached 35%.
In addition
, the percentage of
people
with lower satisfaction had
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% growth from 30% to 40%. the share of
people
who were both highly dissatisfied and weakly dissatisfied experienced a noticeable decline from 10% to 5% and from 40% to 15%.
Furthermore
, the constant 5% of
people
did not respond to the survey.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, befor with synonyms.
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