The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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smoking is infamous for being one of the most addictive, yet unhealthy habits,

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quite many

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smoking. It is my view that because

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enhaling

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as well as

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perception that certain individuals have on smoking

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desirable for many. Psychological warfare is one of the most pragmatic

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addiction. First of all, the age of smoking has been decreasing with a continuous trend among the young generation of

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, resulting in many diseases

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discomfort. It is important to acknowledge that smoking is one of the most obsessive habits that any person could possess

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the perilous chemicals

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as nicotine.

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, scientists have proved that nicotine

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is highly addictive and has

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to enslave

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who are

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to it.

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, there is

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a group of individuals who contend that smoking

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cigarettes

relieves their stress somehow. By

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inhaling

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they are able to control their stress level amid the time of difficulties as the

smoke

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which is rich in certain substances annihilates many neurons and healthy cells, once it is

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enhanced

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human body. Thereby,

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who have to perform in an environment with excessive stress tend to

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cigarettes

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, giving up smoking

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is not easy and requires an unwavering decision and immense dedication to the purpose. Commencing a public

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psychological

war on smoking will have a corresponding impact on the diminishing portion of smokers in

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society

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to that public awareness

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campaigns

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of anti-smoking education programmes and conducting seminars in workshops and public areas to discourage

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from smoking

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and

eventually for them to forswear

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jeopardizing behaviour.

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, despite the majority of

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aware

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risks and consequences associated with smoking,

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however

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some of them

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smoking because they are too addictive to give it up. Raising public awareness and strengthening the mental abilities to fight off

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smoking are the most efficient solutions to

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people

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from smoking.

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