You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Although
smoking is infamous for being one of the most addictive, yet unhealthy habits,
nevertheless
quite many
people
are keep
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smoking. It is my view that because
people
find
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istantaneous
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instantaneous
gratification
while
enhaling
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inhaling
exhaling
enhancing
smoke
as well as
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perception that certain individuals have on smoking
make
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it
a
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desirable for many. Psychological warfare is one of the most pragmatic
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ways
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to tackle
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this
addiction. First of all, the age of smoking has been decreasing with a continuous trend among the young generation of
people
, resulting in many diseases
as well as
discomfort. It is important to acknowledge that smoking is one of the most obsessive habits that any person could possess
due to
the perilous chemicals
such
as nicotine.
For instance
, scientists have proved that nicotine
consumptions
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is highly addictive and has
capability
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the capability
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to enslave
people
who are
addictive
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to it.
Secondly
, there is
also
a group of individuals who contend that smoking
cigerattes
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cigarettes
relieves their stress somehow. By
enhaling
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inhaling
smoke
they are able to control their stress level amid the time of difficulties as the
smoke
which is rich in certain substances annihilates many neurons and healthy cells, once it is
enhailed
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enhanced
into
a
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human body. Thereby,
people
who have to perform in an environment with excessive stress tend to
smoke
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cigarettes
.
On the other hand
, giving up smoking
habit
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habits
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is not easy and requires an unwavering decision and immense dedication to the purpose. Commencing a public
phsychological
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psychological
war on smoking will have a corresponding impact on the diminishing portion of smokers in
socities
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society
.
In addition
to that public awareness
compaigns
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campaigns
such
as
integration
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of anti-smoking education programmes and conducting seminars in workshops and public areas to discourage
people
from smoking
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and
eventually for them to forswear
this
jeopardizing behaviour.
To conclude
, despite the majority of
population
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is
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being
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aware
the
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risks and consequences associated with smoking,
however
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however,
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some of them
are still keep
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smoking because they are too addictive to give it up. Raising public awareness and strengthening the mental abilities to fight off
the
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smoking are the most efficient solutions to
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people
from smoking.
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