You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: It is generally accepted that exercise is good for children and teenagers. Therefore, physical education and sport should be compulsory for all students in all schools. What do you think? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
In today's era, health is more important
then
anything else. Some people prefer to do yoga and other activities Replace the word
than
while
some like to get knowledge about all those through
theoretically. In my opinion, sports and physical education need to be a major subject in schools because Change preposition
apply
children
can learn so many things from that as well as
they can make their career
in that too.
On the one side, there are so many other subjects which are important for kids
development too. Change noun form
kids'
kid's
Kids
can make their career
in that too. They need to know about science, math, history
for their Correct word choice
and history
day to day
life. Some Add a hyphen
day-to-day
kids
prefer to do cooking, driving
courses. Correct word choice
and driving
For example
, some children's
are facing disabilities and they are not able to move or sometimes they are not able to make any decisions. So nobody can force them, and it is going to be difficult for them to Change noun form
children
doing
any exercises.
On the other side, physical education needs to be compulsory because Change the form of the verb
do
children
can make their career
in that as well as
they can learn so many things about their health. Because of busy
Correct pronoun usage
their busy
life
some families or Add a comma
life,
kids
prefer to eat from outside, this
thing can help them to divert their mind. Their
are chances that they will prefer to eat Replace the word
There
healthy
Change the word
healthily
as well as
they can teach other people. To
instance, Change preposition
For
according to
Ajit
newspaper reportCorrect article usage
an Ajit
that
Correct word choice
apply
,
in 1998 most Remove the comma
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
the
people used to play sports because of amazing Correct article usage
apply
career
opportunities.
To conclude
, it is depend
upon the circumstances Change the verb form
depends
as well as
kid's
personal choices. But I feel that it needs to be the main subject so Correct article usage
the kid's
children
can learn about their health.Submitted by rajdeepsidhuk23 on
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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