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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Working from home has become
more
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 common practice in several
companies
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 with good connectivity.
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, a number of
companies
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 still forbid
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culture
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a culture
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 and encourage their
employees
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 to come to the office to boost productivity and
professionality
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professionalism
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. The
firms
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who
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that
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 let their staff
to
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work from home are usually multinational
companies
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 that have flexible working hours. Their operations are largely based on connected IT platforms so it won’t affect the productivity even though they are not in their cubicles. Consulting
companies
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 like PwC
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 one of the global
firms
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 with
work-from-home
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a work-from-home
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culture
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. PwC’s
employees
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 are used to leading meetings with global clients and colleagues from all around the world, maximizing the use of emails and video conferences to conduct their responsibilities.
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 allows them to have flexible working
hour
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 and
ability
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the ability
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 to work from anywhere, including their homes. In my own view,
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culture
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 should be encouraged in more
working places
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workplaces
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 to support work-life balance and let the
employees
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to
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decide their priorities.
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, local corporations are usually
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sceptical
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this
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 norm. With limited use of emails and reluctance to conduct online meetings, these
firms
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 still stick to the traditional working
hour
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 and rigid place. A giant telecommunication firm
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 as Telkom is among the
firms
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 who still expect their
employees
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 to
clock-in everyday
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clock in every day
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. In
this
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 company,
employees
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 usually interact directly with their peers and higher-ups when working because most of their jobs require physical attendance
such
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 as town hall meetings and site visits.
Due to
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 those activities, the company thinks that showing up to
office
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the office
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 is necessary to stay professional and be more productive. In conclusion, some multinational corporations allow people to work from home because they have the infrastructure to do so, which in result creating a more balanced work-life condition for their
employees
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. Despite that, local
firms
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 are still reluctant to adopt the
culture
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 because of several limitations in using advanced technology.
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Task Achievement
To enhance task achievement, it is important to ensure that the response fully addresses all parts of the task. While your essay touches on both views and provides a personal opinion, you may need to further elaborate your discussion. Make sure to devote equal attention to all the requested elements in the prompt.
Coherence & Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, it's crucial to structure your essay in a way that flows logically and naturally from one idea to the next. Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs, but be careful not to overuse them. Avoid repetition of ideas. Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and that all sentences within it are relevant to that idea.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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