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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.
The graph describes how much
time
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 a teacher spent
at
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in
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Japan
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 ,Spain,
Iceland
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 and
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USA
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the USA
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 in Primary,Lower Secondary and Upper Secondary
School
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Schools
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 in the
year
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 2001.
In
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Primary School
USA
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 has the highest
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number of
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working
teachers
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of
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750
hours
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comparing
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compared
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 to Spain,
Japan
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 and
Iceland
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 .In
Iceland
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, the
time
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 spent by
teachers
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 in the
year
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 2001 is less than 600
hours
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. In the lower Secondary
level
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Iceland
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 has the lower working
teachers
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 of 600
hours
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 .
At
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In
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 the same
year
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at
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in
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USA
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the USA
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 ,the
time
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 spent by
teachers
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 is 1000
hours
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 . It is the highest
time
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 spent by Lower Secondary school in the
year
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 2001 .
Japan
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 stands
last
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 in the
year
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 that
time
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 spent by the
teachers
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 at Upper Secondary with 700 working
hours
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 .
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USA
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The USA
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 has approximately 1200
hours
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 ,
while
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 Spain and
Iceland
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has
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have
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 below 1000
hours
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 .
Japan
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 has the least amount of all other
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countries
countires
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countries

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, japan, iceland, usa, year, teachers, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts, time allocation, primary education, lower secondary level, upper secondary level
  • teacher workload, classroom hours, non-teaching duties
  • educational system, comparative analysis, pedagogic practices
  • instructional time, professional development, teacher's responsibilities
  • discrepancies, workload distribution, teaching hours
  • statistical data, time management, educators, pedagogues
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