The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.

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sales

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of fairtrade- labelled two items like bananas and

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, Switzerland, Denmark,

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increased slightly in 2004 which is 2

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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Financial education should be included as a mandatory subject in schools to prepare students for managing money effectively.

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones nowadays has unwanted effects on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some celebrities such as film stars, sportsmen and pop musicians are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which jobs should be highly paid?