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The two maps describe how the Colwick Arts Centre changed from 2005 to now

The two maps describe how the Colwick Arts Centre changed from 2005 to now
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The two maps describe how the Colwick Arts Centre changed from 2005 until now.
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, as
it
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apply
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can be seen in the illustrations, the
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center
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centre
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 witnessed several improvements, especially
wasteland
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the wasteland
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 and
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the constructions
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constructions
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construction
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 of new buildings.
According to
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 the map, the concert hall and the cinema shared a building in the past.
However
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, they have now been divided into two separate buildings, which are located
on
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in
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 the upper right-hand corner of the
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center
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centre
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. The meeting rooms are moved to the northwest corner.
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, they
also
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 built a drama studio between the cinema and the meeting rooms,
as well as
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 a central exhibition area constructed in the middle of the
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center
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centre
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. In 2005, the two galleries were knocked down, and they built a new gallery and a café on the middle west side of the midpoint. The
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center
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centre
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 converts the wasteland into an outdoor exhibition and performance space. In the middle of the plain, which is surrounded by rows of trees, has been erected a stage.
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, students of the centre will find many desks on each side of the trees.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "describe" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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