The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The graph depicts the percentage of households that
own
washing Wrong verb form
owned
machine
, Fix the agreement mistake
machines
refrigerator
and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
cleaner
, in one nation for around 100 years, Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
whereas
the second chart illustrates the number of Linking Words
hour
spent on housework during the same time period.
Change to a plural noun
hours
Overall
, the ownership of Linking Words
refrigerator
and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
cleaner
showed an upward trend, Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
however
, Linking Words
washing
Add an article
the washing
a washing
machine
Fix the agreement mistake
machines
was fluctuating
between 1960 and 2019. The amount of time spent doing housework in Wrong verb form
fluctuated
household
Add an article
the household
was showing
a downward trend in the same period of time.
In 1920, individuals owning Wrong verb form
showed
refrigerator
was zero Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
percentage
, Replace the word
per cent
however
, it drastically rose to 90% in 1960 and from there it steadily grew to 100% in 2000. The ownership of Linking Words
vaccum
cleaner was at 30% in 1920 and it increased to 100% in 2000, which continued to stay steady throughout Correct your spelling
vacuum
years
. The possession of washing Correct article usage
the years
machine
was 40% in 1920, Fix the agreement mistake
machines
however
, it started fluctuating from 1960 to 2019.
In 1920, Linking Words
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
hours
spent washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning was 50 Use synonyms
hours
per week. Use synonyms
Linking Words
Consequently
It declined to 20 Add a comma
Consequently,
hours
per week in 1960 and it steadily decreased to 10 Use synonyms
hours
per week in 2019.Use synonyms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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