2) The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to raise the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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the
numerous issues Correct article usage
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such
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pollutions
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pollution
transports
. Fix the agreement mistake
transport
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problems. I agree with the given statement. My inclination is elaborated in the ensuing paragraph and relevant examples .
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obligate
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purchasing electrocars Change preposition
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true that in Germany , Italy and France emitting of the greenhouse gas had been dropped by 43% .
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the
global topics Correct article usage
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challenges
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the challenges
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the
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excited
about the environment .
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be excited
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make
is
decreased and Verb problem
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have
been
more accessible than before . To add to Verb problem
become
this
, the purchasing of these cars has doubled .
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