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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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It is becoming more popular in developing nations to see multinational corporations. There are some benefits
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 as the progress in the economy they create in these countries and the availability of jobs,
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, the
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 of some small local businesses and the lower selling rate of local
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 can be its drawbacks. The main advantage of the increasing number of these types of companies is the economic progress.
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 can bring wealth which boosts industries, trade, and other aspects of the economy.
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, more jobs will be available for the local people.
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 because more workers and managers are needed to work for these companies which can be a good opportunity for locals to find a job.
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, after opening a branch of Apple company in Dubai, many local graduates were thrilled by the good news of being accepted to work under
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, one of the main disadvantages of
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local
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 because of the good reputations and qualities of international items, and,
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, citizens might refrain from buying their local
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. Another disadvantage is that some small local shops could be closed.
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 the unfair competition with these huge strong establishments, and
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, some might be shut down or go bankrupt.
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, many amateur Syrian entrepreneurs,
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after the harsh competition they had with
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, were forced to close their fabric factories. In conclusion,
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 the advantages of the popularity of multinational organizations in developing countries are the economic progress and the improvement in the job market,
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, its downsides are the drop in the average selling of local
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 and the closure of some small businesses.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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