In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Fast
food
is quite popular among
the world, Change preposition
in
as
a result, conventional cuisine Correct word choice
and as
are
replaced by fast Change the verb form
is
food
in many nations. This
trend has an adverse effect on society
, families and individuals
. I strongly agree with this
statement and this
essay will discuss it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
with, traditional foods
are become
exist by fast Change to the active voice
become
have become
foods
in many nations, especially western countries due to
busy life. Even though, fast foods
should give
enormous Verb problem
cause
health
issues such
as heart stroke and obesity. This
certainly affects people
Change noun form
people's
lifestyle
and life expectancy, Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
consequently
, heart
attack ratio Correct article usage
the heart
is
increased dramatically in recent days. Verb problem
has
For example
, a recent report Time of India said that,
many Remove the comma
apply
adults
death Change noun form
adults'
adult's
ratio is being
increased after Wrong verb form
rates have
covid
Correct your spelling
COVID-19
due to
people
have
eaten many fast Wrong verb form
having
food
items during the corona
period of time, Correct your spelling
coronavirus
they
ordered easily from Correct word choice
and they
the
online Correct article usage
apply
food
delivery companies.
Furthermore
, home foods
are always good for health
instead
of junk
foods
because fast foods
have more adverse like essence for taste, and chemical
for preservation. Fix the agreement mistake
chemicals
This
should affect people
Change noun form
people's
health
, not only individuals
' health
but also
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
. Change noun form
society's
For instance
, in USA
folks have more Correct article usage
the USA
health
issues due to
eating more junk
foods
in
Change preposition
on
regular
basis. Correct article usage
a regular
Hence
, replacing traditional cuisine to
Change preposition
with
junk
foods
can bring enormous Fix the agreement mistake
food
health
trouble to the
families, Correct article usage
apply
individuals
and society
.
To conclude
, replacing traditional foods
to
Change preposition
with
junk
foods
bring
more Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
health
issues in
nowadays around the world and Change preposition
apply
this
trend has negative
impact on Add an article
a negative
individuals
, families and society
. Therefore
, I strongly agree with this
statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope people
should change their eating habits from junk
foods
to healthy foods
like salad.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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