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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Recent years have witnessed the ever-increasing revolution of genetic engineering in modern life.
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 some people believe that humans get many benefits from these techniques, others are concerned about their negative consequences.
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and explain why their advantages are superior. On the one hand, there are some compelling reasons why some people are worried that they may damage their lives, particularly in two main fields, including food production and the cloning of humans. **Genetically modified crops** are already being grown, and they can threaten the nature of ecosystems or even our health. Some recent research indicated that eating genetically modified food can lead to the uncontrolled growth of our brain and body, especially in children.
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, it is unpredictable what would happen if the world was covered with cloned humans which are used to fight wars or provide **body part replacements.**
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, it is a fact that genetic technologies have been applied in many fields with considerable contributions. I
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 believe that we will find ways to mitigate the risks and use them in a responsible way. In terms of medicine, a range of laboratories was invested to implement experiments with the aim of analyzing and decoding human genes, which have been considered a great way to find more effective treatments for severe diseases,
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 as cancers.
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, scientists may use genetic engineering to produce vaccines or correct a genetic deficiency before a child is born. In conclusion, I am convinced that genetic engineering will have a positive impact on our lives, and that people's fears will be unwarranted.
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task response
You have managed to introduce both views and your own opinion which aligns with the requirements of the task. However, to achieve a higher score in task response, ensure that your opinion is clear throughout the essay, not just in the conclusion. Your opinion should be consistent and woven through each paragraph for a stronger argumentative stance.
coherence cohesion
You have presented a basic logical structure. In order to improve, consider developing more cohesive devices, such as referencing words, substitution, and the use of discourse markers that signal contrast, concession, and conclusion, to enhance the flow of information throughout your essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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