The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the total in millions number of tourists visiting art museums in six different countries: France, the USA, the UK, Korea, Spain, and Russia, in 2011. In 2011, the Louvre became the most hits
museum
to visit, with around nine million
visitors
per year. Followed by, the second most popular, the Metropolitan
Museum
placed in the USA, with 6 million
visitors
,
while
the British
Museum
is slightly below it. The total
visitors
of
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to the following three museums have slight differences, respectively with the National
Museum
of Korea being the highest, with slightly over 3 million
visitors
, the Museo del Prado in Spain, and the State Hermitage in Russia slightly below it. Compared to the three least-visited museums, the Louvre attracted nearly three times as many
visitors
as their combined total. So,
It is clear that
the Louvre in France is the most popular art
museum
this
year. Meanwhile, in 2011, the state hermitage in Russia was getting the least of
visitors
.
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  • visitor numbers
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • trend
  • visitor demographics
  • attendance
  • special exhibition
  • promotional campaign
  • footfall
  • gallery capacity
  • cultural attraction
  • art enthusiasts
  • exhibit
  • statistical comparison
  • tourist attraction
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