The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graph demonstrates the pollution level in London between
1600and
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1600 and
2000. It is measured in micrograms per cubic metre.
Overall
, it is obviously clear that
both
Sulphur
dioxide
and
Smoke
have
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started from
lowest
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the lowest
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point and
had
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fluctuated
at the end
of the 20th century.
In addition
,
both
of them experienced recovery. Clearly, the
Sulphur
dioxide
also
has a significant growth and fall throughout the given period compared to the
Smoke
. Between 1600 and 1750, they started to increase,
while
the figure for
Sulphur
dioxide
skyrocketed,
Smoke
increased at a slow pace.
Besides
, in
this
time period ,
Sulphur
dioxide
and
Smoke
noted their highest point at 750 and 250
metre
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,respectively.
Then
the indicators continued to grow. For the rest of the years, they
both
continued to increase at a slow pace.
Following
this
numbers kept
fluctutating
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fluctuating
until between 1850 and 1900,
where
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when
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sulphur
dioxide
reached a high of
approximetely
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approximately
800 micrograms per cub
metres
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metre
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and
pollutuion
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pollution
was caused by
smoke
which peaked at 450 micrograms per cub
metres
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metre
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. During the 20th century, the levels of
both
pollutants fell dramatically, though there was a great deal of fluctuation within
this
fall.
Clearly
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Clearly,
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air pollution was a bigger problem in London in the early 20th century than it is now.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, sulphur, dioxide, smoke with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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