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The charts below show the distribution of world water and the use of water in three countries.

The charts below show the distribution of world water and the use of water in three countries.
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The charts illustrate how the global
water
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 is distributed and its uses in three different countries.
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, the majority of
water
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 in the world is salt
water
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 with the freshwater mainly
source
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 from ice and glaciers. The Middle Eastern countries (Egypt and Saudi Arabia) use
water
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 mainly for agriculture.
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, industry is in need of
water
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 the most in Canada. 97% of
water
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 across the globe is from salt
water
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 and the rest of 3% is from freshwater. The freshwater is divided
from
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 three sources. A large part of freshwater is from ice and glaciers
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,
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that is
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 reaching 79% of it, the other 20% is from the ground, and the rest is from the surface (1%). The three different countries (Egypt, Saudi Arabia, and Canada) utilize
water
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 for various uses which are agriculture, domestic and industry. Egypt and Saudi Arabia use around 75-80% of
water
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 for agriculture.
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, Canada uses 80% of its
water
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 for the industry sector.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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