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Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is believed that the governments have wasted a bunch of time and money to preserve
animals
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 in the jungles and they should use
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 money on people.
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 I agree that it may raise the living standards and the motivation for the
develop
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 of a country, I
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 argue that the opposite
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 prevails as
animals
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 are important for research and for the operation of the world around. On the one hand, some drawbacks can be brought out if the authorities stop preserving the
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.
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 with, it will be a loss for researchers.
Animals
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 play a vital role in many fields
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 as health, chemistry, biology and so on as their body parts can have a lot of functions in studying. A telling example is that the bones of the sharks are useful for humans’ health.
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, mother nature may lose its balance.
Animals
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 are part of the food chain.
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, when they become extinct, not only nature but
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 the lives of people cannot run smoothly.
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, a countable number of advantages can rise
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when countries invest money
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in
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 their citizens. First and foremost, the nation still consists of a huge proportion of the poor. There are many dwellers lacking vital requirements to live,
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, food, clothes, houses or opportunities to go to schools.
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,
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 activity can boost the economy of the country. Being opened the door to reach knowledge, dwellers will have opportunities to sacrifice their intelligence
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 their strength to develop the country. In conclusion, it is encouraged to use
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 for wild
animals
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’ preservation as
animals
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 are
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 important tool for investigators and they can maintain the stability of the Earth.
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, the local authorities cannot ignore the creature settling down on their lands as some of them still struggles for a living and they can
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 contribute to the growth of the nation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem stability
  • pollination
  • water purification
  • climate regulation
  • eco-tourism
  • scientific research
  • moral and ethical responsibility
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • financial cost
  • social issues
  • healthcare
  • education
  • fund allocation
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