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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read any entertainment books because they think it is were of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some parenting couples believe that reading knowledge-based
books
 is much better than reading any comic
books
.I mostly disagree with the author's statement, in order to support my statement with a few points
such
 as that reading only educational
books
 makes the child - lack of spontaneity, general awareness and lose special interest.
Firstly
, these engaging novels directly and indirectly help the reader to pursue their hobbies
as well as
, give them a platform so that they can openly express their point of view and thoughts and at the same time evolve their knowledge base through supplementary materials.
For example
, Deepika was not good in academics but she enjoyed acting. So, slowly and gradually her interest inclined towards Bollywood magazines and mimicked their style. And, she
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famous Bollywood actress.
Secondly
, if children accustom themselves beyond their regular learning base, they get more familiar with unknown topics and develop self-awareness and imagination.
Additionally
, these habits of understanding something beyond their academic reading enhance their comprehension skills and self-motivation to learn something new. Let's say, a child who has an average scorer but over
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time gained interest in daily news - so he started reading 3 to 4 newspapers daily. Which helped him improve his English and had a direct impact on his school grades. Undoubtedly, advanced knowledge-based
books
 are an aid in growing careers -
while
, during school and college. But, the funloving check
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 through from monotonous working schedules - it is like re-boosting them to start something new and fresh. I conclude that both types of reading are necessary for the child. Parents should not more focus on either of them.
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