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Movies with spectacular car chases are a thrill to watch and fun too but they have led to an increase in car accidents on urban roads. Do you agree? What do you think can be done to make the youth more aware of road safety?

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Although
 it is incredibly fun to watch
car chasing
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scenes
 in some movies,
this
 may lead to
the
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 increasing rate of
car
accidents
 especially on urban roads. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why I firmly believe that
this
 is true and I will propose some strategies to avoid
further
 adverse impacts on
this
 matter. There are many convincing reasons why
this
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these
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 particular
scenes
 of
car
 chases are dangerous. First and foremost, we should acknowledge that young people are always curious, specifically
to
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about
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 the
scenes
 that they adore much. In
this
 case, showing the spectacular
car
 chases possibly
urge
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urges
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 them to
drive
 fast like what they watch. Another thing to consider is that some youth
as
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 their age do not
pose
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 enough capabilities
in doing
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such
 professional actions. Even if they have been trained to do so, they may lack
of
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some wise consideration in taking the crucial decisions on the road.
As a result
,
this
 exciting yet careless behaviour may lead to the rising
numbers
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number
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 of
car
accidents
.
Further
 effects that may be caused by
these reason
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 can
be solve
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 through some serious initiatives.
Firstly
, it is a must to establish particular regulations on
minimum
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the minimum
a minimum
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 age for driving on the road. By implementing
this
, those who are still underage would be unable even to try to
drive
, unless they are on training accompanied by adults or professionals. Another
sollution
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 is providing the proper training as a main requirement before getting
the
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 legal driving permit.
This
 is because many people
getting
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get
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 driving
permit
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permits
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 just by paying money to the officials without having enough capabilities to
drive
 wisely. If we take the training seriously, the
accidents
 could possibly be reduced. In conclusion, I agree that the
thrilled
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 movie
scenes
 of
car
 chasing might lead to
the
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an
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increasing
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increase
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of
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in
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car
accidents
 especially for youth as they are typically curious to try what they watch without having proper capabilities.
This
 issue can be tackled by implementing
regulation
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regulations
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 on
minimum
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the minimum
a minimum
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 age for driving and providing the required training before they get legal
permit
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permits
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 to
drive
.
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