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The graph compares the number of international students enrolled at Cathedral School, divided by their country of origin.

The graph compares the number of international students enrolled at Cathedral School, divided by their country of origin.
The line graph gives detailed information about how many international students registered at Cathedral School, divided by their birthplace.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a dramatic go go down a year later, afterwards it took leadership at the beginning of the period, South America gained second place, but there was a
sharply plunged
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sharp plunge
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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