Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to change this negative attitude towards international tourism?
The international
tourism has a negative Correct article usage
International
attitude
towards some people
.Some people
feel unsecure
about the tourists that they are visiting their Correct your spelling
insecure
country
.Let us discuss about
the reasons and the steps to change the negative Remove the preposition
apply
attitude
among the people
.
Foreigners while
visiting to
our Remove the preposition
apply
country
they
are Correct pronoun usage
apply
unknown
Correct word choice
unaware
about
the rules and regulations of the area that they are visiting .They are putting the waste on the prohibited areas Change preposition
of
.foreigners
throwing the garbage anywhere Correct your spelling
Foreigners
this
leads to irritate to the locals
.This
can cause land pollution. Tourist
Fix the agreement mistake
Tourists
people visiting
Wrong verb form
visit
the
prohibited places Correct article usage
apply
whithout
the knowledge of the area Correct your spelling
without
people
and not following
the Wrong verb form
follow
government
norms. This
leads to some danger for them for example
, in
the beach places Change preposition
on
whithout
the knowledge of Correct your spelling
without
locals
and guards they are going in
the sea Change preposition
into
.when
the huge wave arrives they may be taken by the waves Correct your spelling
When
this
might cause dead
or missing of a particular person .so the local Replace the word
death
people
has negative attitude
towards this
.
To change this
negative review the government
should take various measures to control the
international Correct article usage
apply
tourist
, they should provide Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
a
clear data about Correct article usage
apply
the
particular places and they should guide them . Correct article usage
apply
Government
should take various steps to remove the negative attitude
from the locals
by telling about
the advantages of Correct pronoun usage
them about
foreigner's
visiting Change noun form
foreigners
to
our Remove the preposition
apply
country
,the level of unemployment can be reduced and the areas and towns will get get
different Remove the redundancy
apply
inovation
to attract the Correct your spelling
innovation
people
who are visiting from other
Change the wording
another country
other countries
country
.It may leads
Change the verb form
lead
a
Change preposition
to a
posible
chance Correct your spelling
possible
to increase
the relationship between Change preposition
of increasing
two
Correct article usage
the two
countires
.
Correct your spelling
countries
Finally
, I conclude that to change the negative attitude
towards the
Correct article usage
apply
foreigner
,s ,the Fix the agreement mistake
foreigners
government
should take proper response of this
to encourage the Correct pronoun usage
apply
locals
and the
international tourism.Correct article usage
apply
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