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The chart gives information about the changes that has happened in a park of rural area

The chart gives information about the changes that has happened in a park of rural area
The chart gives information about the changes that have happened in a
park
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 in a rural
area
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. There is a lot of difference in the
park
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 between 10 years ago and now,
such
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 as new activity places.
Overall
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, in one decade the
park
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 became totally unrecognizable and modern,
however
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, some places have not changed. A decade ago tennis court was in the middle of the north
area
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 of the
park
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. A
children
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's play
area
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 was located at the northeastern. A football pitch was situated in the centre of the field. A pond was below the football pitch. There were woods next to the pond. A car
park
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 was located opposite the
children
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's playground. There is the only thing that has not changed is the entrance. An entrance is still located northwestern corner of the
park
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. Nowadays, the tennis court has been twofold expanded,
however
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, at the same location. The
children
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's play
area
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 has been extended and separated into two areas, one of them is the
children
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's soft play
area
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, another one is still with the same name. The football pitch has been contracted,
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 new restroom has been built beside it. The pond has been converted into a boarding lake. A new cafe has been opened
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 recently developed a picnic
area
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 that has been set up at the corner of the southwestern
area
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 . Above the picnic
area
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 is the car
park
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 which has been expanded. Apart from that the
park
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 is surrounded by a cycle path.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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