The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2020.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of
teachers
of both genders in six different types of educational settings in the United Kingdom in the year 2020.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the highest number of female
teachers
were in preschool
as well as
in primary school,
while
male
teachers
were in private training
institute
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and
University
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.
According to
the given data, nearly 94% of ladies were teaching in nursery. Followed by almost 92% of primary school female
teachers
. Meanwhile, male shows the least amount of interest in pre-schools
as well as
in primary schools.
Moreover
, in secondary
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buildings
, there was almost 55 per cent of women tutors and males were at the percentage of 42. Moving
further
, male and female
organization
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give equal preference to educate students in college 50%.
Therefore
, in university nearly 70% of males
teachers
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there,
whereas
females were just 29%.
Lastly
, almost 58% of gents
teachers
was in private training institute which was the largest as compared to female tutors in the UK in the given year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • educational settings
  • primary
  • secondary
  • tertiary
  • adult education
  • vocational training
  • private tutoring
  • disparity
  • dominate
  • majority
  • minority
  • gender distribution
  • workforce
  • trend
  • ratio
  • comparative analysis
  • significant difference
  • visual representation
  • data interpretation
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