The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information 

Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make 

comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
line
chart
shows how many inquiries
are
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were
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collected from
tourist
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the tourist
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office in 2011. It is clear from the
line
chart
that to see the average from receiving
inquire
Replace the word
inquiries
show examples
by
person
,by
email
,and by
telephone
.
According to
what is shown, receiving
inquire
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inquiries
show examples
in
person
are taking increasing from January to June .
Moreover
, as we see in the
line
chart
receiving
inquire
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inquiries
show examples
by
email
is less than receiving
inquire
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inquiries
show examples
by
person
because we think the people did not prefer to
sent
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send
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the
inquire
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inquiries
show examples
by
email
.
While
,
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apply
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receiving
inquire
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inquiries
show examples
by
telephone
, it shows starting by fluctuating level from January to February . After that, it
is have
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has
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a fixed level between
month
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the month
show examples
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of march
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march
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March
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and April. And the
line
chart
show
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shows
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this
way receiving
inquire
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inquiries
show examples
by
telephone
is more comfortable for people and the office.
To sum up
, we could say that receiving
inquire
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inquiries
show examples
by
person
and
telephone
is a good way to
sent
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send
show examples
th
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the
to
inquire
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inquiry
show examples
, and many people do not prefer to
sent
Change the form of the verb
send
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
inquire
Replace the word
inquiries
show examples
by
email
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, chart, person, email, telephone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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