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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares initial salaries and their figures after three years in five occupations in the United Kingdom, measured in GBP,
while
 the table shows the average duration in a week of each profession, measured in
hours
.
Overall
, salaries
of
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 all jobs slightly rose in three years with
underground
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the underground
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 driver recorded as the highest despite having the shortest weekly working
hours
 and
nurse
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the nurse
a nurse
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 had the lowest compensation,
while
teacher
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teachers
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as well as
firefighter
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firefighters
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 had the longest average working
hours
 per week.
Firstly
, in both years,
underground
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the underground
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 driver was the highest-paying job at around half a hundred, followed by
firefighter
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a firefighter
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 at around 40,000 and teacher with a mere 10,000 from that number. The rest of the occupations namely police and nurse received salaries at slightly beyond 20,000 and below that number
in particular
 order.
Lastly
,
teacher
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teachers
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 and
firefighter
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firefighters
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 had the highest average time for duties
both
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at 55
hours
 weekly, followed by police officials who spent 40
hours
 per week at work,
while
nurse
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nurses
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 accounted for a mere 2
hours
 from underground driver's mean working
hours
 at 36 which was the lowest figure.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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