Students in schools and universities learn more from their teachers than through other means such as the Internet, libraries, and TV. To what extent you agree or disagree?
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To sum up
all mentioned before, strongly disagree with this
statement, because individuals can have better conversations with teachers
in class
and it is about clear data
and information
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
provide
Wrong verb form
provided
teachers
at schools and universities.Change preposition
to teachers
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