Students in schools and universities learn more from their teachers than through other means such as the Internet, libraries, and TV. To what extent you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that
Internet
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, TV, libraries and other technology can better teach students than
the
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teachers
.
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I strongly disagree with
this
statement, because individuals can have better conversations with
teachers
in
class
and it is about clear
data
and
information
that
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provide
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teachers
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at schools and universities.
Firstly
, if individuals study with some technology without help from the teacher, it means that in
this
class
will not have
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a conversation
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. It is undeniable, that communicating about the topic with classmates and with
teacher
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the teacher
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during the
class
will have
impact
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an impact
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on your learning
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and understanding
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topic clearly.
For instance
, for me better way to fully catch the statements that I have in
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,
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is to
have
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talk about it with my friends.
Also
, clear
data
and clear
information
are important in searching and studying. Many sites on the
internet
gives
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some false
information
and sometimes there is different
data
that provide
internet
in different sites.
For example
, when I was younger, I had homework to
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about our ancient Rome.
However
, during the
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I saw a lot of
data
and
information
which is on the
internet
about one topic. I
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not decide
wich
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of the the
data
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, but
then
I found it easily by lecture which
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my
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teacher in the lesson.
To sum up
all mentioned before, strongly disagree with
this
statement, because individuals can have better conversations with
teachers
in
class
and it is about clear
data
and
information
that
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apply
show examples
provide
Wrong verb form
provided
show examples
teachers
Change preposition
to teachers
show examples
at schools and universities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • direct instruction
  • personalize
  • learning experience
  • immediate feedback
  • clarification
  • social skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • vast amount
  • information
  • resources
  • self-directed learning
  • independence
  • critical thinking
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