The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the amount of
visitors
of
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particular
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a particular
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Caribbean
island
between 2010 and 2017.
This
provides a piece of information about
visitors
staying on
cruises
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ships
, staying on
island
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the island
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, and
total
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the total
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amount of all
tourist
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tourists
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.
Overall
, the amount of cruise
ships
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ship
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pessenger
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passenger
passengers
has increased
while
tourist
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tourists
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stayed
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staying
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on the
island
had a
decline
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declining
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trend in the
last
4 years. From 2010 until 2013, the total number has
had
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apply
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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over
the
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apply
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time with two main
variable
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variables
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shows
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showing
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different
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a different
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pattern
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patterns
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. The
visitors
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number of visitors
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staying on
island
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the island
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displayed an increase
since
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from
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2011
until
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to
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2013
by
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1 million of
visitors
. Meanwhile, the number of cruise
ships
attendance had a period of instability and reached 0.5
millions
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million
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in 2013. From 2014 until 2017, both
variable
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variables
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shows
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showed
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an upward movement and reached the
hinghest
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highest
point
by
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3.5 million in total in 2017. The
visitors
who
staying
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stay
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on the
island
reach
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reached
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a period of stability at 1.5
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tourist
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tourists
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over
period
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the period
a period
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.
Moreover
,
the
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apply
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cruise
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number of cruise
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ships
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ship
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visitors
has
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have
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a
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apply
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growth and peaked at 2 million
tourist
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tourists
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in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, ships, tourist with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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