Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visits such places?
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revolutionising
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globalisation
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places
like Sahara
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the Sahara
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has some benefits along with
some drawbacks to visit
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There are some adavantages
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places
. One of the main benefits is that the tourists can explore the new venue as well as
new experience
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kind of location is far away from the residential places
, therefore
, they might get new experience
through their difficult journey. Another plus point is that the Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
traveler
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traveller
get
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a trip
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Antartica
.
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Antarctica
can
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trip
is quite expensive as compared to the Correct article usage
a trip
otherwell-known
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other well-known
places
because this
location is far away from residential venues, hence
, they should spent
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accommodations
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vehicles
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extreme weather condition can cause more health issue even Correct article usage
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might
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good physical condition and fitness is needed for Correct article usage
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these
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besides
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condtion
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condition
they
can climb without getting Hypothermia.
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, the population like to visit the
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places
in order to they
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experience
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experiences
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task achievement
Your essay needs to focus more on directly answering the benefits and disadvantages instead of providing indirect or semi-related points. Ensure that the question posed is being answered comprehensively.
coherence cohesion
Consider using a variety of cohesive devices and clearer paragraph structures to improve the flow of your essay. Moreover, avoid overcomplicating sentences and aim for clarity and brevity in your expression.
task achievement
Support main points with relevant, specific examples, and ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea. Try to elaborate more on the impact of tourism on these difficult environments instead of a general discussion on tourism.
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