Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visits such places?

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where conditions are difficult like

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extreme weather condition can cause more health issue even

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Your essay needs to focus more on directly answering the benefits and disadvantages instead of providing indirect or semi-related points. Ensure that the question posed is being answered comprehensively.

coherence cohesion

Consider using a variety of cohesive devices and clearer paragraph structures to improve the flow of your essay. Moreover, avoid overcomplicating sentences and aim for clarity and brevity in your expression.

task achievement

Support main points with relevant, specific examples, and ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea. Try to elaborate more on the impact of tourism on these difficult environments instead of a general discussion on tourism.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visits such places?

Your opinion

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

A number of People are moving from rural areas to cities. Is it a positive or a negative development?

some people say that school children should learn how to grow food and cook with it in their lessons. what is your opinion about that?

Some people think governments should spend as much money as possible exploring outer space. Others argue they should spend the money for poor people. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.